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I have two different common/coalition app essays. One is about struggle to find a place to study as a student in a family that doesn't have a lot of money and how my love of learning helps me. Another is about my dad and I's love for presidents and how it inspires me to help others. I have been told that my second essay is not focused enough on myself, but I also feel like my first essay is to vague. Which one should I use?

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I heard your essay on the live stream today. I do agree with the feedback. Maybe you should submit your other essay to peer review and get some feedback there too. To me it does sound like a very interesting topic.

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