Live Essay Review

Recorded Wednesday, October 28 at 09:00 PM

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About this livestream

Description

Get your college essay reviewed live during Wednesday's event.

Yesh Datar will review a select number of essays live during Monday's stream. For each essay, he'll walk through how admissions officers would read the essay, then go paragraph by paragraph to offer suggestions for improvement.

To submit your essay for review, please use the following form.

Your host

Undergrad College: Boston University '20

Major: Medical Science

Graduate College: Boston University School of Medicine

Work Experience: I've been working at CollegeVine for 3 years mentoring students through BS/MD and undergraduate admissions. I am currently a medical student and have done research at Boston Medical Center, Dana-Farber, and the Brigham and Women's Hospital.

Audience questions

These are questions asked by students and answered during this live session. If you have any other questions, you can request an answer from Yesh and other CollegeVine experts in an upcoming livestream or on the Q&A Forum anytime.
6:29Nithyasree:do you have to start with an intro like that, or could you just say something like "I have always been money savvy" or smthg?
10:53Amaya:Is this being recorded because I can’t hear or see anything?
20:54Rebecca :If we have a prior relationship with a university (2x summer residential engineering program), what is the best stylistic method of including that into our “Why ‘X’School” essay? I don’t want to talk about the summer program so much that I don’t have enough words to address what specific classes in and out of my major (and why), and seeking research opportunities with specific professors. Thx!
21:47Lauren:I have a similar essay where I wrote about my love of animals and how I pursued that outside of school in other academic programs. I mentioned some of those programs in my essay - would you suggest that I take that section out?
22:35Orla:What advice would you give in terms of writing a good "hook" to capture the reader's attention?
23:19Rankin:i wrote about my sport of track &field and how one season changed my work ethic
24:10hiba:I'm still confused with two topics about my common app essay to write avout my grand-ma death or my father being alcoholic
24:48Nga:How would we know if our essay flows well?
25:26Zainab:how do we adequately answer the prompt if it's only 150 words? How should we go about it?
38:46Orla:What are the most cliché/most-written essays? What do you warn against writing about?
41:21Rankin:I talked about my interests in the sport as a hook, then talked about an injury along with training in the big championship at the end in which I talked about one race in particular. Would that be cliche?
42:27Jill:You said the 2nd essay had too many ideas. What if the student isn't sure of focus within a major and wants to explore?
51:54Lauren:I'm interested in majoring in biology and minoring in something related to social change. do you think that I need a segue between the two topics or is it okay if I just go straight from talking about bio to social justice?
53:29Rebecca :Do you have a way of making sure new essays are reviewed? We’ve heard this mountain climbing essay before.
53:59Rankin:if we submitted our essays thru the form what is the likelihood that we get feedback?
66:15hiba:for the other essaus will you send us the feed-back
67:11Zainab:where'd you get your shirt
68:35Jill:Are all admissions officers trained to read essays a certain way? Essays are so subjective. What one person thinks is captivating could be boring to another person. What makes one person's feedback valid?
71:34Lauren:for abbreviations in the essays, should we spell out what they stand for? or is that unnecessary because it will show up ink the activities section?