Could someone give me their opinion on my personal statement?

I feel good about it being honest, but I feel as if there is something wrong with it. As if something is missing.

;-;

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@Jael_S2388 days ago

Sure! What's your personal statement?

[🎤 AUTHOR]@Tabi8 days ago

Could I send it to you on private?

@Jael_S2388 days ago

Unfortunately, no. Part of the Collegevine community rules are that no personal contact info can be posted. But you are absolutely right to protect your personal writing. I am sorry you cannot contact me privately. I recommend asking a trusted teacher or other mentor/adult to read it and provide feedback. Please lmk if there's any way I can be of help!

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