Live essay review with Elias

Recorded Saturday, October 30 at 08:30 PM

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About this livestream


Join Elias for an installment of our Live Essay Review!

During this event (designed specifically for current high school students), Elias will select a few pieces of writing submitted by the audience to review LIVE on air. Any type of writing is welcome in this review — college and scholarship essays, papers for class, articles for your school’s newspaper, or even personal projects of your own. For each piece, Elias will walk through what you’ve written, paying particular attention to any special review requests, and offer suggestions for improvement.

You can submit an essay for review to this form. See you there!

Your host

Undergrad College: Harvard University '17

Major: Music

Graduate College: University of Michigan, M.M.

Work Experience: Now in my fourth year at CollegeVine, I have helped dozens of students gain acceptance to their top-choice schools and have also advised and mentored thousands more through my livestreams. Apart from my work at CV, I am also a professional conductor and a multi-instrumentalist. I currently serve as the music director of the Apollo Ensemble of Boston, and I have led symphonic concerts and operatic productions throughout the United States.

My Admissions Story: Initially interested in pursuing a career as a performing cellist, I applied almost exclusively to music schools with dual and double degree options and ultimately enrolled in the Tufts University/New England Conservatory Dual Degree Program. Unhappy with the combined program and worried I'd never feel like I was fully a student at either school, I logged back into in October of my freshman year. I can't say I went about the transfer process in the smartest way (I only applied to two schools!), but Harvard miraculously accepted me (or 'excepted me' as I wrote in a celebratory Facebook post that day - no one ever let me live that one down), and the rest was history.

Audience questions

These are questions from the audience that we had time to answer during the live session. If you have any other questions, you can request an answer from Elias and other CollegeVine experts in an upcoming livestream or on the Q&A Forum anytime.
0:11@isabelv:Hi! I submitted my essay and was wondering if you could go over it.
0:13@isabelv:I submitted the form for the essay. It is my common app essay prompt #5.
0:15@Prsnt:when will the stream start?
0:23@riya_2022:Did the live start??
0:25@Nidhyati:Has the sessions started? I dont see anything in livestream yet. Thanks
0:28@fani:Hi, can you do mine first? I have to leave in a little bit and really wanted your advice.
2:27@unior:Hello Elias :)
2:29@maria_sukhomlinova:I'm sorry, but can anyone else see the video?
6:45@collegebound22:what is the name we should search for the youtube channel?
6:52@unior:Could you review my essay (it's my ED essay)? It's a small (300 word) supplemental essay– X College community is characterized by engagement, inclusion, and collaborative partnerships........
8:57@Gleb:It's 649, and the essay is mutliple paragraphs. That might just be typeform
25:36@Gleb:Thanks Elias :)
25:39@Daniel_lance:Is it possible to get a list of the essays that will be reviewed?
26:07@collegebound22:Why not just write as we speak? I don't understand the need to use such formal "big word" language.
26:17@gsharmss19:Hi I'm not sure if you got my message since my network is lagging, but I wanted to ask if it would be possible for you to review my Why NYU? essay, thanks!
26:41@Ducat:Glen it seems you reorganized your priorities and realized what motivates you—family. Now you found proper balance in personal and professional life
27:04@unior:Since you're going to do it first come first serve (totally understandable btw!), can you scroll through the essays you're going to cover tonight?
27:07@jefe:random pls
27:21@Nidhyati:1st come 1st serve
27:25@taruschirag:random random
27:31@hocuspoquis:I think that random would probably keep more people in the livestream!
27:34@diana:Randomized please
27:39@CollegeEssays246:It would be unfair for kids who weren't able to submit the form early
27:43@unior:I prefer that you do my essay (jkjk) 😂 First come first review is good because it's fair.
27:47@Nidhyati:1st come 1st serve is only fair
27:53@riya_2022:RANDOMMM lol
28:29@Nidhyati:No random
28:31@taruschirag:Princeton Prompt?
28:57@collegebound22:wasting time voting! lol
31:38@unior:Guys, tap <Shift+Enter> to add spaces between each and every one of your paragraphs in Typeform. I do it every time I submit :) [This is for Windows. IDK how it works for Mac. Windows supremacy!]
36:31@Felicitas:can you do a school specific one next?
36:33@taruschirag:do admission officers read the essays just like you are right now, or just speed read super fast
36:45@riya_2022:paint pallete
36:46@collegebound22:yes, a palette
36:57@diana:I think it could be both
44:30@collegebound22:I was wondering the same thing as @taruschirag. Is this how the admission folks read the essays or do they just read them?
44:30@diana:I feel like so far, I haven't really learned a lot about the applicant. I feel like this is more focused on the narration instead of reflection and growth.
49:48@collegebound22:got it! Thank you. I appreciate your help!
50:43@cguan:Hey, I'm a cellist and applying to colleges/conservatories as well :)
51:38@diana:No, we love you Elias!
52:15@collegebound22:We can learn something from your reviewing any essay, it doesn't have to be our own. Thank you.
52:18@Wenjie:Do you know anyone do double major in music and science at Northwestern?
64:10@unior:I rated it 5 starts because I don't want you to lose your job /(joking) I find these live streams really helpful. It truly deserves 5 stars :)
64:21@collegebound22:the line wrapped around the store.
64:24@Csmithson:Do you think there are essays where it would be more appropriate for it to not be a narrative?
66:00@shodes:Love ur style - how about general guidance on use of ‘the’ as in ‘The sunbeams’ or “I” all the time
66:40@meredith0014:As someone who is deaf, this sort of sounds like pitying deaf people
72:10@Wenjie:When writing college essays, is it generally true that the less is more? I mean to be concise.
72:26@Casino55:I unwittingly was rude to a deaf person at a checkout. He gestured for me to lower my mask so he could read my lips to understand. I did then pulled up my mask. Tgen he asked me another question but I forgot to pull down my mask. I realized my mistake & lowered the mask again. We got done with the transaction & both smiled at the episode. He taught me something.
73:11@unior:Will this Livestream happen next week?
74:07@Wenjie:My son is preparing piano audition right now. Any words of wisdom?
77:47@diana:Thank you, Elias!! Good luck everyone
77:50@Csmithson:Do you have any tips for the unique UChicago essay?
77:59@unior:I feel like going for a run before a public performance helps my nerves (it's scientifically proven)
79:09@Wenjie:Thank you so much!
79:11@sssss:if I am mentioning some unique places or vibes regarding my university, will the Addimssion officer understand the mentioned signs regarding the university between the essay lines?
80:24@Wenjie:Good luck with your conducting!


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