Live essay review with Robert

Recorded Thursday, December 2 at 12:30 AM

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About this livestream


Join Robert for an installment of our Live Essay Review!

During this event (designed specifically for current high school students), Robert will select a few pieces of writing submitted by the audience to review LIVE on air. Any type of writing is welcome in this review — college and scholarship essays, papers for class, articles for your school’s newspaper, or even personal projects of your own. For each piece, Robert will walk through what you’ve written, paying particular attention to any special review requests, and offer suggestions for improvement.

You can submit an essay for review to this form.

See you there!

Your host

Undergrad College: Yale University '21

Major: Ethics, Politics & Economics; Classics (Intensive)

Work Experience: As a recent graduate of Yale University, I am excited to begin my first year with CollegeVine! In many ways, CV was a natural fit for me -- at Yale, I worked for over two years in the Office of Undergraduate Admissions, beginning as a Senior Interviewer in the summer of 2019, during which I interviewed over 200 first-year applicants for the 2019-2020 college admissions cycle. After the summer ended, I became Lead Recruitment Coordinator, a full-time position responsible for executing and overseeing Yale’s numerous post-admissions decision yield initiatives, as well as serving as a spokesman for the university both in person and online. Over the past two years, I have had the privilege of interacting with hundreds of students and their families at all stages of the college application process.

My Admissions Story: Having always been interested in studying a variety of subjects within the Humanities and Social Sciences, I applied to a smattering of liberal arts colleges and universities (mostly on the East Coast) with strong departments in these areas, large and diverse student bodies, and varied extracurricular opportunities. When my college admissions decisions rolled in, I immediately accepted an offer from my dream school, Yale University, which I had always felt best embodied the opportunities and goals that I desired from my college experience -- and since that day, I’ve never looked back.

Audience questions

These are questions from the audience that we had time to answer during the live session. If you have any other questions, you can request an answer from Robert and other CollegeVine experts in an upcoming livestream or on the Q&A Forum anytime.
2:09@KimC:Yes, your all good!
2:57@bendajew:can hear fine
25:32@biscoff:Is this too focused on academics?
26:50@Afafi:In this case for example, what if this writer realized the world is corrupted by controversial topics? Is it okay to mention such controversial events in college essays?
28:51@biscoff:do colleges think this is too cliche since its about their major?
30:40@snsh5713:Hi Robert - since there are probably many essays that have been submitted for review, is there any way to let people know if their essay is likely to be reviewed in this session.
44:22@fani:if a school asks for a resume, can most of it be copy and pasted from the activities section of the common app? cause the school has both
45:03@fani:they require a resume and i have to make it now
48:13@fani:why do colleges ask for resumes? is it just so they can have a more condensed version of your activities to skim through faster?
49:03@biscoff:why do colleges make us do a "non evaluative" interview
52:15@biscoff:This is extremely helpful. Will you be hosting another one next week?
67:06@Antibroccoli:Hello I would live it if you read my essay if u have time. I was just looking for an overall insight of what u think nothing in depth. I believe the prompt starts with" im not sure what prompt this would fit" . Thank u.
74:22@Dandy:What can make a personal essay strong enough to grab the readers attention
77:15@khoaionthemic:Does the admission officer actually read the full essays students send or does they skip if the intro is not intriguing enough?
79:45@biscoff:Any tips for not comparing with others/staying positive during the (extremely competitive) application process?
92:56@Dandy:When it comes to writing an essay about your interest do you write a quick summary or fully write about the topic you were given or chosen to write for your essay?
94:28@snsh5713:do you think the theme works well for the intellectual vitality essay
95:50@snsh5713:Yes! I have written a rserach paper on Ovid's Heroides
96:53@snsh5713:Yes, that's correct. I'm concerned about too much overlap between humanities and STEM and creating confusion
98:06@snsh5713:Thank you for your thoughtful feedback
102:05@fani:is it true that colleges only spend about 8 minutes reading each application
103:51@fani:Robert you are a gem stay awesome king thank you so much for everything!
104:20@globeTrotter:Thank you!
104:27@Afafi:Thank you so much!
104:29@snsh5713:Thank you so much!


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