Live essay review with Robert

Recorded Thursday, December 9 at 01:00 AM

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About this livestream


Join Robert for an installment of our Live Essay Review!

During this event (designed specifically for current high school students), Robert will select a few pieces of writing submitted by the audience to review LIVE on air. Any type of writing is welcome in this review — college and scholarship essays, papers for class, articles for your school’s newspaper, or even personal projects of your own. For each piece, Robert will walk through what you’ve written, paying particular attention to any special review requests, and offer suggestions for improvement.

You can submit an essay for review to this form.

See you there!

Your host

Undergrad College: Yale University '21

Major: Ethics, Politics & Economics; Classics (Intensive)

Work Experience: As a recent graduate of Yale University, I am excited to begin my first year with CollegeVine! In many ways, CV was a natural fit for me -- at Yale, I worked for over two years in the Office of Undergraduate Admissions, beginning as a Senior Interviewer in the summer of 2019, during which I interviewed over 200 first-year applicants for the 2019-2020 college admissions cycle. After the summer ended, I became Lead Recruitment Coordinator, a full-time position responsible for executing and overseeing Yale’s numerous post-admissions decision yield initiatives, as well as serving as a spokesman for the university both in person and online. Over the past two years, I have had the privilege of interacting with hundreds of students and their families at all stages of the college application process.

My Admissions Story: Having always been interested in studying a variety of subjects within the Humanities and Social Sciences, I applied to a smattering of liberal arts colleges and universities (mostly on the East Coast) with strong departments in these areas, large and diverse student bodies, and varied extracurricular opportunities. When my college admissions decisions rolled in, I immediately accepted an offer from my dream school, Yale University, which I had always felt best embodied the opportunities and goals that I desired from my college experience -- and since that day, I’ve never looked back.

Audience questions

These are questions from the audience that we had time to answer during the live session. If you have any other questions, you can request an answer from Robert and other CollegeVine experts in an upcoming livestream or on the Q&A Forum anytime.
3:37@varunramanathan11:How do I fullscreen the stream?
11:06@biscoff:Did you say you are going to read the essays of the people here?
30:56@biscoff:Could you please do the Henry Ford and the Piano one?
34:22@biscoff:There is a quote from Ford at the top
34:47@biscoff:Thank you
35:19@Exaltedrealms:yes i can see now
44:42@user123:Would you say the 3rd paragraph well written?
54:25@user123:Could you do the Yale essay one about economics?
63:41@snsh5713:Could you do the Common app essay that starts with 8 cells and in-vitro fertilization.
67:42@snsh5713:The first line is - my first baby picture was a mosaic of 8 cells
67:44@snsh5713:It's just the additional prompt
67:46@snsh5713:a topic of your choice
73:04@snsh5713:Embracing their stories
78:12@snsh5713:The formatting is incorrect. This is the next paragraph
79:03@amyburton:Is this live right now?
79:06@snsh5713:A new paragraph starts after this
79:07@Gleb:Thank you so much Robert!!!
80:32@amyburton:How can you review my essay?
89:30@amyburton:So you do these every Wednesday night?
89:37@snsh5713:Thank you so much for your feedback
90:20@amyburton:Okay, thank you!
92:24@Exaltedrealms:thank you so much


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