Live essay review with Robert

Recorded Thursday, December 23 at 11:00 PM

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About this livestream

Description

Join Robert for an installment of our Live Essay Review!

During this event (designed specifically for current high school students), Robert will select a few pieces of writing submitted by the audience to review LIVE on air. Any type of writing is welcome in this review — college and scholarship essays, papers for class, articles for your school’s newspaper, or even personal projects of your own. For each piece, Robert will walk through what you’ve written, paying particular attention to any special review requests, and offer suggestions for improvement.

You can submit an essay for review to this form.

See you there!

Your host

Undergrad College: Yale University '21

Major: Ethics, Politics & Economics; Classics (Intensive)

Work Experience: As a recent graduate of Yale University, I am excited to begin my first year with CollegeVine! In many ways, CV was a natural fit for me -- at Yale, I worked for over two years in the Office of Undergraduate Admissions, beginning as a Senior Interviewer in the summer of 2019, during which I interviewed over 200 first-year applicants for the 2019-2020 college admissions cycle. After the summer ended, I became Lead Recruitment Coordinator, a full-time position responsible for executing and overseeing Yale’s numerous post-admissions decision yield initiatives, as well as serving as a spokesman for the university both in person and online. Over the past two years, I have had the privilege of interacting with hundreds of students and their families at all stages of the college application process.

My Admissions Story: Having always been interested in studying a variety of subjects within the Humanities and Social Sciences, I applied to a smattering of liberal arts colleges and universities (mostly on the East Coast) with strong departments in these areas, large and diverse student bodies, and varied extracurricular opportunities. When my college admissions decisions rolled in, I immediately accepted an offer from my dream school, Yale University, which I had always felt best embodied the opportunities and goals that I desired from my college experience -- and since that day, I’ve never looked back.

Audience questions

These are questions from the audience that we had time to answer during the live session. If you have any other questions, you can request an answer from Robert and other CollegeVine experts in an upcoming livestream or on the Q&A Forum anytime.
0:50@Duda:We can!
0:52@safmehraneh:We can see and hear you!
6:22@vennyy:can we still send in essays
7:04@Uni2022:Hey Robert, just wanted to start by saying thank you to you and the whole college vine team, these reviews have been really helpful to me during this process! If you have time could you go to my Why NW essay? It starts with "Whether it was Filipino cuisine," Thanks again!
12:16@summerorbanwrites:Hi Robert!
12:17@summerorbanwrites:If you end up reviewing one of them, two of the essays I've submitted are in non-traditional formats: I've written my Harvard Intellectual Life essay in an article style and my Pomona Excited To Learn More into a poem (due to Typeform formatting problems I indicated line breaks as / and paragraph breaks as *** incase that was confusing at first). Unless you plan on going into an English/Language Arts related major, would writing an essay in an unconventional format come off as frivolous or superficial to admission officers?
41:31@globeTrotter:Due you think “enlivened” is better or “shaped” my childhood?
45:03@Sabaa:Do you review essays other than college essays?
45:23@globeTrotter:So I should start with “As an avid…” and end with “I’m thrilled”? And change reorder the sentences? Thanks Robert!
74:11@jaisphor:(writer here!) Thanks so much! I have a whole page of written notes from you, your feedback was very helpful!
82:42@Antibroccoli:This essay was mine. Its a Yale essay and i really appreciate you liked it. Thank you 😁
82:48@Antibroccoli:I wanted to show that I also see the arts of the club members.
83:07@Antibroccoli:Simple but cozy!
86:46@Sabaa:Are you going to do the rest of the essays in another essay? And, do we have to submit those again?
87:13@summerorbanwrites:Bye Robert!
87:54@globeTrotter:Thanks Robert! 🐐
88:10@Sabaa:Thank you!!

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