Live Essay Review

Recorded Saturday, October 17 at 07:30 PM

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About this livestream


Get your college essay reviewed live during Saturday's event.

Yesh Datar will review a select number of essays live during Saturday's event. For each essay, he'll walk through how admissions officers would read the essay, then go paragraph by paragraph to offer suggestions for improvement.

To submit your essay for review, please use the following form.

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Undergrad College: Boston University '20

Major: Medical Science

Graduate College: Boston University School of Medicine

Work Experience: I've been working at CollegeVine for 3 years mentoring students through BS/MD and undergraduate admissions. I am currently a medical student and have done research at Boston Medical Center, Dana-Farber, and the Brigham and Women's Hospital.

Audience questions

These are questions from the audience that we had time to answer during the live session. If you have any other questions, you can request an answer from Yesh and other CollegeVine experts in an upcoming livestream or on the Q&A Forum anytime.
15:29@Applesauce:How many essays are you going to go over during this session? Just wondering.
16:37@divyamjindal03:sir, what kind of transitionals can I use in this essay ? I knew it was required in some parts but can't figure out how to use them
17:32@Applesauce:How important are supplementals compared to your common app essay?
18:59@divyamjindal03:ohk. Also, how should I approach the learning curve without getting technical ?
19:31@patelar915:Are you going to post a recording of this session?
19:54@anonymous:is it too late to submit?
36:32@anonymous:could you elaborate on what you said about admission officers not "clinging on to certain details", I didn't really hear that too well
37:38@Applesauce:Like if my family had no great struggles because of it but one of my extracurriculars was greatly effected, should I include this in the COVID essay or just leave it out to not seem like I'm making an excuse?
38:05@anonymous:Is it okay to have multiple lessons or identity traits reflected within one essay for this prompt?
39:09@Applesauce:What do you not recommend putting in the COVID essay part of the common app?
40:13@anonymous:Will there be another Live Essay Review event?
40:50@anonymous:Just a follow up, is it okay of there are multiple lessons we talk about from a single background?
41:32@anonymous:You went over the sentence structure of listing and how many common app writers just briefly overview a bunch of experiences; what are some other common writing styles?
55:31@anonymous:I was thinking about writing my essay on a challange/struggle I faced. How do I still show who I am as a person and my strengths without making it sound too negative/ having the one bad experience define me?
56:31@RebeccaOpher:Is it better to emphasize a specific character trait we possess with multiple experiences or emphasize a specific experience and seed multiple character traits we have?
57:31@anonymous:Do you have any tips for making an essay unique? Relating an experience to a concrete lesson or characteristic, check. Show not tell, check. Always answering the "why", check. Anything else?
59:16@anonymous:If you want to talk about a niche or philosophical idea, how can you still make it relatable?
59:39@anonymous:How can we create a memorable last line?
60:26@anonymous:If a challenge isn't life or death, or a serious illness or tragedy, should we avoid the topic?
73:40@Applesauce:My essay begins with a long story about a cleanup I hosted but the beginning of that story isn't extremely interesting. My essay develops into a powerful story about custodian appreciation and I think how it develops makes up for a lack of "hook" in the intro. Is the first sentence of your essay always something that needs to capture the reader's eye or can exceptions be made to this?
74:45@lmarcela601:How can I write an amazing introduction?
75:17@divyamjindal03:Hey ! I spent some time thinking about the learning curve you told me about- the kind of books I read, the people I talked to but while writing about that i'm not able to actively keep in connect with the theme of order and chaos. How can I work on that ?
75:58@anonymous:Would you ever read your own essay that got you into BU?
76:18@anonymous:What if my whole essay is my journey to learning the lesson, but I only talk about how I demonstrated this lesson through my life in the last paragraph briefly? Should I adjust this proportion?
77:22@anonymous:If I want to string together several different narratives that substantiate one singular lesson, what are some important things to do?
79:01@anonymous:At first I put the intro as the second last paragraph, but then someone told me it would work better as an intro. Do you think it wouldn't work there either?
79:25@anonymous:When will the next essay review be? So I can submit my essay in time haha
80:25@Applesauce:In the covid essay are we writing an actual "essay" or can we just write plain sentences explaining?
81:07@divyamjindal03:how do we figure out when an essay is ready for submission ?


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