College Essays: How to Show Not Tell

Recorded Monday, December 26, 2022 at 11:00 PM

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About this livestream

Description

“Show, don’t tell!” is probably a phrase you’ve heard ad nauseam while trying to write your college admissions essays. In this stream, Sophie will break down exactly what this means and provide examples of how you can transform bland writing into flavorful phrasing that your readers will enjoy.

Essays should be fun, both to write and to read - though it may not feel like it as admissions deadlines creep up. We at CollegeVine understand your frustrations and are happy to provide a supportive forum in which you can receive all the essay help you need! Don’t miss out on this opportunity to ensure your essays are in the best shape for admissions.

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Sophie Alina

Education
B.A. Math, Vanderbilt University, Cornelius Vanderbilt Scholar | SMU M.Ed. | Vanderbilt Ph.D student
Bio
I'm so proud of my students!!! From full-tuition scholarships to admissions into Ivy League schools, congratulations to each one of you in the Class of 2023!

I am a Vanderbilt Ph.D. student and Russell Hamilton Scholar at the Peabody College of Education and Human Development. As an Applications Consultant, I have collaborated with students to gain Ivy League acceptances, full-tuition scholarships, and admission into top-choice schools.

As a teacher for three years, I have worked with over 400 elementary, middle, and high school students, giving me the skills to break down difficult topics into organized steps and work with students with a variety of learning differences and skills. As a graduate student and Master of Education graduate, I not only have strong writing chops, but also the ability to teach these skills to the students I work with. One Harvard professor said that the opening to my Ph.D. personal statement was one of the best introductions they had ever read.

In high school, my Indian mother inspired me to pursue academics and music. I was valedictorian, a National Merit Scholar, and won third place in my category in the Texas State Science Fair. I also founded a math club at my elementary school. For three years, I did research at my local university. In the summers, I was accepted into highly selective research opportunities. I was also an avid violinist. My passions for research, music, and math are all part of my journey today.

After being awarded three full-tuition scholarships, I attended Vanderbilt on a full-tuition merit-based scholarship as a Cornelius Vanderbilt Scholar. There, I majored in mathematics and received Honors in the College of Arts & Sciences and graduated as a Top 20 Outstanding Senior. As a former premed student (I plan to pursue my M.D. after the completion of my Ph.D.), math major, violin performance minor, and social science researcher, I have a strong interdisciplinary foundation. This background enables me to effectively work with students to blend complex ideas with personal experiences to create compelling essays. I am extremely excited to use my experience as an applications consultant, teacher, and student to help you create a competitive application that shows how amazing you truly are. I cannot wait to work with you! Schedule a first-time consultation, select a package, or send in an essay for review, and you’ll hear back from me soon.
Specialties
PsychologySociologyEducationChemistryBiologyHealthMath

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