Early Decision deadline! - live essay review with Priya

Recorded Monday, November 1 at 12:00 AM

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About this livestream

Description

Join Priya for an installment of our Live Essay Review! Before you start Halloween fun, we know you have to make the Early Decision deadline - and we're here to help!

During this event (designed specifically for current high school students), Priya will select a few pieces of writing submitted by the audience to review LIVE on air. Any type of writing is welcome in this review — college and scholarship essays, papers for class, articles for your school’s newspaper, or even personal projects of your own. For each piece, Priya will walk through what you’ve written, paying particular attention to any special review requests, and offer suggestions for improvement.

You can submit an essay for review to this form!

Your host

Undergrad College: University of California, Los Angeles '20

Major: Psychology

Work Experience: I have been working at CollegeVine for two years in various capacities, including mentoring students, editing hundreds of essays, and creating blog content. I have also interned in healthcare consulting.

My Admissions Story: I am extremely grateful for all the help I received as an applicant and want to pay it forward by demystifying the admissions process for others.

Audience questions

These are questions from the audience that we had time to answer during the live session. If you have any other questions, you can request an answer from Priya and other CollegeVine experts in an upcoming livestream or on the Q&A Forum anytime.
0:00@Prsnt:HI Priya, I was on elias's and yours stream yesterday but sadly because of the high number of essays you received my essay wasnt reviewed. I submitted 2 essays today: "why northwestern" and "commonapp #6". would really appreaciate it if you could look at one of them especially the commonapp one. My essays are due tomorrow.
0:00@utkarsh:Hi
0:00@ngraf:Yo
0:00@ngraf:How is everyone today
0:47@Alexandraa:Good evening I am Alexandra Kamdem. I have some colleges I want to apply for early action/decision, but my essay is still not looking good I think. I fished it, but I would love for someone to review it for me. Thank You!
0:49@Caela.Uni:Hello Priya! I was on your stream yesterday as well as Elias’s, but did not have a chance to have my essay reviewed. Could you please go over mine today? It's titled “submitting tonight” and was sent in around 6:30.
0:53@JonathanCohen:Hi! I'd be really glad if you review one of my essays - Yale Supplemental MUN, Intellectual curiosity (250 each). Unfortunately though I attended yesterday's sessions I didn't get feedback on them and would be so appreciative if you could review them ahead of tomorrow's deadline. Thanks so much!
0:57@akrey4831:Hello! My name is Angelina Rey, from the Dominican Republic. How is everyone?
0:59@Rijah_The_Ninja:Hi, it's not too late to put my essay in the form, right?
1:11@addy:Hi Priya, I really hope you could take a look at my essay because I had nobody else to share it with to receive unbiased feedback ( since my school counsellor was tied up with other apps) and I'm really nervous!
9:34@vrnallapati:how do i submit an essay for review?
13:42@KaiSlosser:I sent the Bowdoin supplemental essay
13:47@summerorbanwrites:Hi Priya!
13:51@DanielAlper:Hey again Priya! Thanks so much for yesterday's livestream! If possible, would so appreciate it if you shortly review one of my 125 essays - Academic intrest or Why Yale.
13:54@Alexandraa:We can see and hear you!
14:00@tcherian:happy halloween everyone!!!
20:05@Prsnt:thank you
20:23@KaiSlosser:Thank you so much!
26:22@JoanneT:I just submitted Why Rice again
26:35@Caela.Uni:Hello Priya! I was on your stream yesterday as well as Elias’s, but did not have a chance to have my essay reviewed. Could you please go over mine today? It's titled “submitting tonight” and was sent in around 6:30.
32:36@Prsnt:i talked about my aerospace interest in the commonapp essay
32:45@Caela.Uni:Thank you!
41:19@QueenDaDae:Somehow my application was accidentally submitted prematurely without my essay. And I didn't get to attach my app fee waiver either. What do I do when the deadline is tomorrow. I have everything ready at this time.
41:40@addy:thank you so much for your insights :)
42:15@unior:(I hope you are not receiving this text multiple times. My internet is slow and that's why I think my messages are not going through) Hello Priya. Could you review my essay? It's actually due today. It's a supplemental essay with NO word limit (How does the University of X, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to X university. Thank you!
42:19@JonathanCohen:Sorry for re-commenting, but I am an international student and have no counselor to help me, so any review of my essays - Yale Supplemental Essay - MUN and Intellectual Interest - would really help me in general to understand how to better structure my writing.
44:36@JonathanCohen:Why is typeform connecting words all the time?
46:22@JonathanCohen:That's the one! Thank you!
46:26@JonathanCohen:the full version is just above what you read
49:58@ethangibbons:Is it better to make your AO like you and have ur essay super unique and fun but less specific to EC stuff or to have a less engaging essay that has a more substance and EC related stuff
50:03@addy:I wrote my common app essay in the format of a dary entry, does that work? Or is it considered a red flag in anyway
50:23@VSandwar:How should I answer the community questions; specifically the Penn one?
51:13@Rijah_The_Ninja:I am submitting personal insight questions for UC's. I was wondering if they should be more than 1 paragraph or is just 1 paragraph fine?
51:28@MarissaRitter:Should I purposefully try to include metaphors if I usually never use them and have trouble including them?
51:55@Chao:I heard you multiple times talk about "engagement"/ using 'in medias raes' (idk how to spell it haha) to put the reader in the action especially for the introduction. Is that kinda a rule of thumb for a good essay and I'm curious if there are specific types of prompts where you would NOT want to use that as an intro? Thanks for your input, Priya! These examples have been really helpful.
52:52@JonathanCohen:Can you write a good college essay that's not narrative-based? Meaning could you write a good essay that's not in the format of in medias res and then generalization? For example, could an essay with several broken apartstories work or one that doesn't include a story?
53:26@adar:How should I tackle the "Why Major" essay?
54:07@33josied:Is writing about a sports loss too cliche?
54:37@adar:What do you suggest we should focus on in the Why this college essay when the word limit is very low?
55:17@DanielAlper:I accidentally just submitted my app :( ! what do I do to resend edited essays
56:19@Rijah_The_Ninja:Do I have to use all 350 words for my UC Personal Insight Questions? I have one that is 232 words.
56:22@Ali_Matarieh:What is the main focus or goal in mind when writing an essay? Like what is your goal?
57:04@DanielAlper:Thank you so much once again!
57:07@Raanat:Thank you for your time
57:20@Chao:Thank you so much!
57:37@Ali_Matarieh:Have a good one

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